I really need some crits here guys, please.

Background not even thought out yet, bad I know, she will be holding a bow in her right hand ..

Thanks in advance x  You can be as brutal as you like.. I can take it

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Good stuff Wendy, I can't see anything wrong with this at the moment.

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philby:

Good stuff Wendy, I can't see anything wrong with this at the moment.

Thanks phil

Ive put a rough background in and have decided to have a lance instead of a bow, only coz it was easier lol

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I don't know how long that lance is supposed to be but if it's a normal lance then it should be sticking out behind her, they're basically like half-spears when it comes to length.

looking fantastic Wendy, love the POV! no crits from me, i'm not sure you would see the lance behind her to be honest, at that angle it would likely be hidden, or at most the very tip of the lance would be seen

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Seamanarts- I like the piece a lot and the join between the human half and horse half works well with the POV

There are a few areas that need to be attended to on the horse that stand out, First the forward front hoof/lower leg looks good but the shape of the hoof on the other front leg is slightly misshapen. The horse's rear left leg also needs to show the change of angle from the knee/patella area to the hock.

On the chest of the horse there should be a bit more definition of the pectoral muscles ( where the bottom of the neck meets the chest plane)  

The only other thing, that you may already be working on is to resolve the difference between the lighting of the horse (multiply lighting sources as in a show arena) verses the single light source on the woman.

Some of these things you may already be working on resolving.

As far as the spear it's butt end would probably disappear behind her but by changing the angle she is holding it and being able to see both ends might solve the ambiguity of it.

Look forward to seeing it finished :) 

kazky:

looking fantastic Wendy, love the POV! no crits from me, i'm not sure you would see the lance behind her to be honest, at that angle it would likely be hidden, or at most the very tip of the lance would be seen

Thanks Kaz.. erm dont want to look silly here, not hard I know but whats a POV.. I probably know but as the gray matter is not functioning at its best right now it may have slipped my mind  

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hobbyhorse:

Seamanarts- I like the piece a lot and the join between the human half and horse half works well with the POV

There are a few areas that need to be attended to on the horse that stand out, First the forward front hoof/lower leg looks good but the shape of the hoof on the other front leg is slightly misshapen. The horse's rear left leg also needs to show the change of angle from the knee/patella area to the hock.

On the chest of the horse there should be a bit more definition of the pectoral muscles ( where the bottom of the neck meets the chest plane)  

The only other thing, that you may already be working on is to resolve the difference between the lighting of the horse (multiply lighting sources as in a show arena) verses the single light source on the woman.

Some of these things you may already be working on resolving.

As far as the spear it's butt end would probably disappear behind her but by changing the angle she is holding it and being able to see both ends might solve the ambiguity of it.

Look forward to seeing it finished :) 

firstly thank you for taking the time in pointing out a few things, its greatly received

Hooves.. On paper they look good, then when it comes to adding colour etc it goes pete tong so Im off to study up on hooves to see if I can get it looking like the right shapes.

Ive worked on the hind legs now so I hope thats looking ok, I think its all about getting the right light casting correct. The front of the horse is sorted as you will see soon.

As for the spear/ lance I may be ditching that idea all together as I just cant get the right angle, but we will see. once again many thanks

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being a bit slow on this but I think I am getting there, still having a few probs with the lance but I think I got everything else covered, if not let me know

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Point of view, love. I believe that is what Kaz means XD and I couldn't agree more! Beautiful job! As for the hooves I think they look fine. Maybe try adding a bit of rim lighting to help separate them from the background...that's my 2 cents...

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That hoof shape looks much better and Tickledpink's idea of adding edge lighting (from the ground) reflecting on both hoofs would help separate them from the background. 

The overall lighting of the horse part and human part looks good too.

I think there would be a little more definition of the chest muscles since the horse is using them to flex the front legs. Not real strongly just subtle. 

The hind leg is still too 'curvey' without the angular look that the underlying bone structure would give it. It is a very difficult area to depict because of the foreshortening but if you can nail it down.....it would be great : ) 

I'm not very good at sketching on a tablet (kind of slippery) and not sure if I got the horse in exactly the same position but maybe this will help. 

 

Right Ive been slowly working on this.. have been looking at lots of horse anatomy and hope I have it right this time, but please let me know what you think.. have got rid of the lance and replaced it with a sword.. will give it more detail as I go on.. any way here is the next stage.

Thank you hobby for your help with this

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A great job so far Seamanarts.  You have pulled of the 'join' well.  I'd say that at the mo tho' there are issues with the horse main body.  The chest area (especially between the forelegs in the image) needs more mass- made bigger with more bulk.  Or the belly needs taking down.  Currently the horse looks somewhat pot bellied!  THere is also something about the rear left leg and the way that it joins with the main body.  There is a good photo that illustrates a similar pose here.  Like hte sword best btw

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Sinistral:

A great job so far Seamanarts.  You have pulled of the 'join' well.  I'd say that at the mo tho' there are issues with the horse main body.  The chest area (especially between the forelegs in the image) needs more mass- made bigger with more bulk.  Or the belly needs taking down.  Currently the horse looks somewhat pot bellied!  THere is also something about the rear left leg and the way that it joins with the main body.  There is a good photo that illustrates a similar pose here.  Like hte sword best btw

Thanks sinistral, I was thinking that the horse was looking some what pregnant will see what I can do about that.. I think whats making the hind leg out of whack is I may have too much hi-lites and not enough shadow, will see if I can fix that too..  Im liking the sword too needs some detailing though.

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Looking great, Seamanarts !

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