This is the whole picture. I've gone a bit crosseyed over it so any crits welcome.

Finding this topic a bit perplexing!!!

CareldeWinter:

I've reached the point on this where if I do any more it seems to go backwards, so it is probably finished.

Fragg Mostly right. I think if you use the torch, it should be brighter and more focussed, and I might consider moving it into the other arch. also maybe less smoke, not forgetting some torchlight reflecting on the stonework.

 Leave yours alone--it's freaking perfect.  I wish I could do waves like you (bows down in awe).

Thanks for the feedback.  I would rather not move the beacon, but I took your advice on the flame (see below).  Less smoke and I added a weak diffused glow.  My thinking is that fog is basically suspended water droplets so the glow from the beacon should have a slight, diffused glow as seen through the mist filtered by the suspended moisture.

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"The higher we soar, the smaller we appear to those who cannot fly." - Friedrich Nietzsche

That does look better.

 

@careldeWinter : Thanks for your advice, I've done some of progression, I tried to change the yellow glowing colour in the god's cheek, I don't know if it's looks better this way,or the previous one.

 

 any comment and crits are welcome! =)

 

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Hey hey, it's been a while. Set it aside for a while because I wasn't sure where to push it, and now I'm diving back into it to finish everything up. Here's where I'm at now.

 

 

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Fragg:  Looking good.  I see what you're trying to aim for.  I would suggest showing her right foot if you can? 

Helio:  Thanks for the pointer with the "sunny spot".  I was a little blind to it being a focal point of sorts so I'm now taking that into the equation.  Regards to your own idea, have you looked at it from greyscale?  Perhaps this'll clarify your lights and darks for you a little better?

Aldodark:  Cheers man.  I think your idea works better the other way- tribesmen, lightning then storm god seeing as the tribesmen are calling up the god.

Aonodori:  Yeah, I agree with smolin it works better your original way :)

Smolin:  cheers.

Oaodh:  Art is always about simpicity mate.  Its best to work with only 2 colours and use a 3rd as your accent.

Jaytea:  Hi, thanks for the advice.  I've been moving the structure around constantly trying to find the balance I'm looking for.  Still not quite there, though I feel I'm getting there.  Regarding your own idea, i think the cloud directly infront of your characters needs to go or at least toned down.  There's a nice contrast between lights and darks working throughout your idea.

Aceoni:  Looking good.  Not too sure what you're aiming for.  Looking forward to seeing more.

Jojamamida:  I hope you make the deadline.

CareldeWinter:  leave it a day or two and then you'll know if its done or not.  Personally, I'd say yes- YOU'RE DONE!!!!! 

Noahbradley:  Looks good.  I'd move your character more to the left and leaning into the picture rather than out of the picture.  That way you're bringing the eye back into your work.

So I've flipped my painting horizontally just to get feedback on whether or not it works better this way- looking for balance.  Currently I'm targeting the foreground structure and the clouds.  I'm planning on changing the hub area to show more of the city + I think I'll need to curve areas a little to work with the background area.  The "bridge" section, I'm still toying with.  Feedback/suggestions on improving encouraged.

   

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Aldodark: I can't say why, but I like the greenish tinge on his cheeks better than the plain yellow, it looks a bit more glow in the dark, cool necklace too ;) As for the lightning, I think the positioning is better but I liked that there was more in the other one... maybe you could have a few little strands and one big strike down the middle, or at least a few more glows in the clouds, nice job though, its coming along well!

okay here is the b&w and a couple color copies. I went with a split complementary color palette. Violet, green and yellow. Sometimes I look at it and think about just sticking with the black and white. Except that the colors did help me separate the midground and background better.

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Nob Dammit

Another update on mine -

flipped horizontal seems to work better somehow.

Got some dragons in after all :)

Im not sure about the skull on staff though - apart from the perspective being out it may well be leading the eye away from the storm.

Am thinking the storm may need to go a bit more extreme with a nit more stark lighting on the dragons. And probably need to do something about the furry legs although I may leave them as is.

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"Theres no smoke without fire."...

"What about smoke machines?"

g8crasherboy- try flipping the skull-staff and putting it in her other hand. Then you might try cropping the left border up to her hand. A quick fix on the furry legs could be to just crop them out. But then that might throw off the balance of the figure.

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Nob Dammit

Coming into the home stretch--time running out.  Worked on the loincloth (it was bugging me the way it looked before), also worked on the hair, the foreground rocks and added some birds.  Did some minor strokes to the face to bring out her features more (don't know how noticeable the difference is there) as well as fixed up the ears a bit.  Also rusted up her breast plates a bit since she runs around in the rain a lot (LOL). Still got some more I want to do.  Looking forward to seeing all the finished entries--there are going to be some good ones.

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"The higher we soar, the smaller we appear to those who cannot fly." - Friedrich Nietzsche

This is where I finished last night.  Did not get a chance to post it due to a storm moving through my area.  Thought I would put it up before I begin working today.

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CareldeWinter:

This is the whole picture. I've gone a bit crosseyed over it so any crits welcome.

 everything looks really good to me. the only thing i have to say is the section in the background that i circled. its sorta distracting to me, it seems like the dark cloud should go all the way to the horizon. great work!

Zeus vs. the Titan Astraeus, father of the four winds.

Give me any finishing suggestions please.... I think Zeus is too dark considering he is gathering and throwing lightning bolts so I may tinker with that some more tonight

Anything else let me know

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